“You have to drink this. No, don’t fall asleep!”
The insistent voice comes from a long way away close by.
The glass is pushed up to her mouth once more.
Gagging on the salty liquid she pulls away vomiting into the sink.
Hearing the ambulance siren approaching
she wonders why they won’t let her die.
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FIRST AID
I must remain calm, now more than ever.
Seeing the salty spittle bubbling on my daughter’s lips
I feel fear squeezing my throat, don’t panic. Bastard!
“You have to drink this. No, don’t fall asleep!”
I mustn’t forget to take the bottle with me to show the doctors.
“You have to drink this. No, don’t fall asleep!”
I mustn’t forget to take the bottle with me to show the doctors.
Why is the ambulance taking so long?
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CUTTING ALL TIES
Who the hell could be phoning him at this time of night.
He listened to the sobbing almost hysterical voice of his estranged wife.
There was no way he was going anywhere at this time of night.
What kind of a guilt trip was she trying to lay on him anyway?
She would cope alone.
34 comments:
Powerful stuff. I won't say anything else except wow...again.
Wow.
Cathy...This stuff is very scary!
If it's fiction It's awesome!!
If not, it's...heartbreaking!!
Great Writing....Galen
micheal, your turn:)
g-man, The paradox of fiction is that at it's best it mirrors someones truth.
It's not fiction. Glad to know you, bonny lass.
My turn? I'm (maybe)working up to some stuff kid. Not sure I want to share though.
I'm keeping it light for now like I always do.
p.s. It would be nice if you spelt my name right :-p LOL
p.p.s. Love you. Always have always will.
Oh Cathy, incredibly well written.
Wow seems to almost cover it.
Brill, I stuggle to do one.
Cathy,as always, very well written.
very frightening experiences... Tina xoxo
wow! i am speechless
Very nice Cathy. As usual you leave me wanting more.
Antonio
I'm watching "Beerfest" right now -- #1 cracked me up!
Poignant.
You can just see it, can't you, and the husband/father's reaction - brrrr, makes me shiver.
Cathy,
Found this from Shrink wrapped scream's site... I am discovering many new things everyday. You write very powerfully...
will be a regular visitor..
cheers,
Cecilia
shrink, I will definitely be visiting you again.
michael, pre coffee spelling bluder.
logo, what did I miss?
queenie, your struggle paid off in spades!
Tina, you're a sweetie.
blanco,shush!
antonio, greedy boy.
snay,you're too much. LOL
mona, thanks.
val, unfortunately yes.
phaseout, welcome. I'll visit you later.
Wowee madam...
Thanks for playing and warn me next time, will ya?
Have a lovey weekend!
Cathy you never do ANYTHING pre-coffee.
s, BE WARNED. Next weeks is done already....evil laughter.
michael, I pee pre coffee.
This is the very reason I'm doing that 20-mile walk in overnight Manhattan in June.
Powerful stuff Cathy.
Heavy duty industrial strength. Very good.
Cathy - way TMI...WAYYYYYYYY TMI
wow.....just wow....55 word chapters that punch you in the gut.
A big wow Cathy. Good insight in to a often taboo subject.
They moved me.
Morning Cathy,
have a great Sunday!!!
Galen xo
Cathy, I came by the other day to leave a comment... but couldn't, not that day
these are certainly chilling and since most fiction is based on fact, this is someone's truth
they're very well done... you are very good at this
lotsa luv ann xxxx
Great writing as always, yet so tough to read.
Cathy....xo
cathy..like everyone else I have no words except WoW!
thanks for the bowl of milk.:)
tc
Jesus Marimba. This is terrific stuff.
What power you packed into this writing exercise!
..."The paradox of fiction is that at it's best it mirrors someones truth..."
This was fiction at its best Cathy. So very powerful I had to read it several times.
PS: Just hopped over from Michaels site after reading about the diver and wetting myself laughing..
dan, hope you reach your target soon.
travis,heavy duty and light relief we've got it all. I think this blog may be bi-polar.
michael, I was just warming up.
lime,sorry for beating up on you like that.
ebezp, no subject is taboo on this blog.
g-man,If you only knew!!!
ann, hope everything is ok with you. I promise something lighthearted for your next visit.
peurileuwaite, something easier to read next time then.
G-man, oxo
TC, you came for the cream then.
jocelyn, I am way overdue to visit you I'll be by tomorrow.
ali, welcome. now I'll have to work on making my comments more interesting too.
cathy your words are always like cream to me.:)
tc
TC, What a flatterpuss you are today!
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